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-10 for poor thumbnail

+19 for art.

Great overall, really like how I can see the light coming down from the openings.

The eye on the monkey on one side though looks like totally on a seperate spacing than the other though, or maybe's it's the nose getting shoved over so far to the left.

Either way, great composition.

sucho responds:

yea, i should have deepened the shadows between his far eye and the bridge of his nose, his eyes are pretty far apart.

Great coloring and flow.

God damn those yaoi paddles hurt.

I need to avoid them at allllll costs.

I like the overall piece.

If I could change a single thing though, I'd get rid of the onion skinning effect on the upper right since, you're implying motion with the character's body position already, and on a poster, it'd wind up just not looking right, as you have it overlapping on the wall shadow as well, so it just doesn't make much sense to keep it there.

You may want to position the arms at the same height so that his pointed elbows and arms act as an eye draw towards the focal point (the plant), as they are on separate levels, and it creates an unbalanced look. Symmetry here could really strengthen a fantastic piece.

Really fun piece though, and a good composition.

LiLg responds:

Hey! thanks for the tip (I actually already got rid of the onion skinned fetus in all my other versions but I forgot to update this one - sorry about that - I'll fix it now)

Cool pic.

What's Newgrouns.com?

Catoblepas responds:

Do I always have to FUCK up EVERYTHING?

Interesting.

I like how you used a minimal amount of line work on the face out line and circuity to keep the face rather soft. Overall, it's a really strong profile shot, though the shoulder pad/ bandoleer looks a little mushy compared to everything else, you can see the overall bleed through where the edges should be a little sharper.

Great job though.

Robot <3

I fucking love those tire feet. Love how they split. Great design!

Great overall

However, you made a lot of stuff fairly sloppy that ruins it over all, like the lines on her reflected body clearly not being a uniform thickness, and her thighs and calves looking really funky. Her hand has some whack fingers as well, shape wise.

Absolutely love the booty shot and the quick shine on her belt though. You may have also found it a better shot had you lower the angle on the rainbow streaks and upped the opacity slightly, to help show the monster, and guide the viewer's eye towards the fact the girls are flying towards it.

Terrible overall.

Your anatomy needs an incredible amount of work.

Starting with the basics.

You failed to close the line at the top of the head, so it bleeds right into the tail.

The calves come off at seperate angles, which is physically impossible.
One calf even starts under the line, meaning the leg somehow started forming mid thigh.

You drew the breasts incredibly unshapely and rough, showing multiple juts that shouldn't be there for a smooth shape, such a breast.

The line work on the right ear some how meets up with what I'm assuming is the hair line behind the head causing it to look flat, and misshap
en compared to the other ear. I'm talking about the one with earrings.

Your shoulders are of two different sizes.

You didn't bother to account for a back on the character. Your use of extreme foreshortening has in fact cut this character's back side out completely.

The angle of the head versus where her hair fails over also kills her left cheek bone, meaning her head is deformed.

It doesn't look like you bothered to do much of a rough layout over all with the character, and I would strongly recommend you get the basic structure and anatomy of a character down before diving into the full drawing.

I would also recommend investing in a french curve, and lighter pencils so you have an easier time erasing.

You may also wish for shadows to use a shading stub, instead of just scrawling lines under the character, and drawing a line around the outline. It'll look a lot better overall.

FrauPusie responds:

Thanks much for taking the time really write out a real critique. As for anatomy I am very inexperienced and am still learn and your review does point out many issues that I will try to adress in later pieces. As for this piece specifictly I made out of the spur of the moment and was thinking extreme which can accout for the multiple errors. Thanks much and please take time to look over my other pieces when you can. :)

You shouldn't have been there Jeff.

You should have been finishing that round Mike bought you.

That's an amazing pic either way. I should have gotten one, but ah well, I have my Sagat statue. One of 400... and you have your picture... one of a kind.

Fuck.

JohnnyUtah responds:

oh shut up jonas.

p.s. ask swain to do his "jonas impression"

Not bad!

I really enjoy the grizzled mouth. Reminds me a bit of Bernie Wrightson (sp) stuff.

There is a conspiracy within this sentence.

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